Storytime!!

Started writing this yesterday.. dunno if I did it justice.. I might’ve rushed it.. but thats it.. its been a while since I wrote anything.. and I don’t know if it is in anyway better than what I used to write.. but hope someone likes it.. its titled, ‘The story before I went’ it ended up being something connected to ‘A Story Before I go‘ which I wrote two years ago.. oh yeah.. and this is like the first draft and kinda the final draft too :p so be gentle.. heheheh.. and again.. hope u like it..

The story before I went.

[Two hours ago, The day before]

That is your story? i mean? come on?? it cant be that bad?? I mean come on man!! I’ve known you for like two years.. and this.. this is it??

I mean… its shit..

its shit..

rewrite it.. I don’t know.. ask some else to write it for you.. steal something.. but this.. its shit!!

~

[The day before]

That was two hours ago..

Well.. Serigi was one of those rare people who really spat on your face with their opinions.. no matter what.. and spat he did..

A year and eight months.. thats how much its been.. yeah.. time goes by really fast in this…

**phone rings**

hello?

yeah its me.. how are you man? long time eh..

what the fuck? where the hell are you? how did you get this number? man.. yeah.. its been a while.. and..

too long.. heh.. yeah listen..

oh no!! I don’t like it when u start off like that!!

ha!! you haven’t forgotten then.. so you still up for one last retirement blast?? just like old times?

retirement?!!
You Fucking Bastard!!!

Come on!! I have to dig up something on my people right?!

I’m not one of your people Rajiv!! never was..

“never will be” yeah I know.. but the pay is good..
Better than before.. not many of us clowns left in this business..
You still game or not?? I know you need the money.. call me a bastard, but thats my job!! so how about it? a really huge retirement gift..

come on!! you are the best man for the job!! do i have to get down on my knees!!?

i heard you are into eh.. lit-e-rature and all these days? what happened? bumped your head?
*laughter in the background*

none of your business you piece of shit!!

yeah yeah.. I know.. but the other job is!! you in or out.. call me with something.. you got till tomorrow morning..

**click**

…truly.. god forsaken country..

Who’s god? What god? hmmm.. more food for the mind…? nah.. I can hear a VO shouting “cliché!!!” so fuck that.. god is too old a topic to hold anyone’s attention..

How the hell did he find me!! doesn’t matter.. blessing or curse.. its what!? one more gig before you bite the dust? what does it matter.. Rajiv doesn’t need my confirmation call.. he knows I will be there.. he knows that I need it more than anyone.. what a bastard..

one last dance!! one last time.. to don that clowns suit..

one last time..

~

[The night before]

The long drive to my cabin did me some good..

Yeah.. a cabin.. in the woods.. always seen one in the movies.. never dreamed of owning one.. but here I am.. a little away from nowhere.. my own little place in the universe.. all to call my own.. it was in any day better than the rented leaky apartment.. a better place to live in.. a much better place to die too.. hmmm..

The beer eased the pain off the mind.. the pain.. it went out.. after a while.. came back with a vengeance and knocked me out.. and she woke me up again with the same pain almost when the sun was going down..

I was awake.. she kept me awake.. all night long.. like sweet love she kissed me on my forehead.. moved over and smiled.. her eyes half closed.. sweet lips teasing me.. she moved forward and caressed my eyes with her half open mouth.. the heat burning me all over.. i slowly pushed her away but she held on and pushed me back down.. tore my shirt open with her hands.. held me down with her open legs.. her legs locked on my hips.. her face.. moving closer to my chest.. her eyes never leaving mine.. she slowly bit me and kissed me.. and gazed into my eyes and purred.. she sat up slowly.. pulled down her lace blouse.. took my numb hands up to her heavy breasts..

**BEEEEE**

[The Day]

**EEEEEP**

The alarm was very sweet considering everything else in my life.. The beer and the pills.. I guess thats what happened.. It didn’t matter.. as long as the night was gone.. it was another day.. more work to be done.. as long as I am awake.. as long as she is not here..

The calls were made.. The plans where set.. little unni’s birthday party.. that was the last gig.. how many victims.. who knows.. one more party.. one last party..

It was in the evening.. I was to show up a bit after the cake was cut, when they least expected me to show up.. but the plan was impeccable.. the timing needed to perfect.. no wonder Rajiv needed me..

Everything I needed was with me.. It made more sense to me when I think of it now.. why else would I have come to the cabin.. Everything i need was locked up here..

my past..

I was ready..

[The Party, The Day]

The cake will be cut in five minutes.. the music.. the voices.. the wind slowly picked it all up.. and tossed it away..

I could still walk away.. if I wanted to.. the kid will be 10 today.. Rajiv had said.. as young as you.. 10 years into the trade.. bastard.. he used me well.. I could walk away..

I moved closer.. concealed by the trees and the undergrowth..

I could still walk away..

Any minute now.. The cake will be cut.. there will be no turning back..

They all chanted in unison.. he is ten years old today!! there is no turning back now..

I moved closer to the crowd.. I could see him now.. the little ten year old.. the crowd.. caught in the moment.. It was as if I was walking into a photograph.. at least I felt like it..

one last time..

I slowly walked in.. wearing my bright coloured clown suit, Rajiv and his men, as planned, walked in from the opposite side, playing their instruments..

The party had started..

~

one day Serigi.. you will get my story.. and then you will know.. that all of it was not shit.. at least not all of it.

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12 comments to Storytime!!

  • deja_vu

    just re-read it a bit.. and made some small changes.. :) again.. hope someone likes it.. :)

  • Savithri

    Phew! Happy that i am not young any more…and madly in love with anything particular!feel you should imagine an audience of millions who do not know you personaly..otherwise the writing would not go beyond the personal level..Amma

  • deja_vu

    “..who do not know you personaly” and “..would not go beyond the personal level..”

    obviously.. when im writing.. i really dont think much.. and let it flow.. But how in the world is this in any way personal!?! maybe it is your imagination that is limited?! since you know me, your mind is so limited that you cant think of anything in a disconnected way!? well anyway, that is one way to look at it too.. but since this came up!! NO.. it has nothing to do with anything personal.. except for some names used.. which is basically mine.. lolz..

  • ViNi

    I truly agree with what your mother said. The dialogues are very spontaneous, but frankly speaking, i still dun understand what’s this story all about. Hey it cld be me! A writer writes, and its left to the reader to interpret. Keep writing dude..:-)

  • deja_vu

    strange.. is that the only way people can think? or do i really suck at this!? sheesh!?

  • deja_vu

    ok!! what it was!! the story is about a guy, who is trying to write.. do something creative basically.. but is being pulled back into a job he thinks is lame and doesnt want to do.. here the job of a clown, who entertains in birthday parties.. because of his difficulties(who knows what) he has no other choice, but to do so.. personally i thought it was funny..

    and furthur more.. the suicide note.. which happens to be the other story.. could be what happend to the guy in the end..

    oh.. and i feel sick now.. this is how u rape a story.. :))

    all i wanted was ppl to think.. giving my explanation here limits your imagination very badly.. so i think i have killed the story be trying explain it.. and i still think there is more to it than i explained..

    but i could care less now..

  • Savithri

    ,
    by personal level ..it doesn’t denote personal experience based..what ever ur experience may be you should transcent it beyond ur subjective level….and it will happen naturally…..one way is to work in the minutest details of the story…so that u would be able to go to another level..
    unni it would work..try another one…try to develope each and every moment of the charecters life … each moment in the story in details… u can edit afterwords if you feel like..
    amma

  • Aparna

    heyy..dont wana repeat d same comments.but honestlty, i gota echo som of wat vini said. its kinda altogether 2 abstract 4 me.mayb im more conventional,i lik d old storybook style

  • Aparna

    heyy..dont wana repeat d same comments.but honestlty, i gota echo som of wat vini said. its kinda altogether 2 abstract 4 me.mayb im more conventional,i lik d old storybook style

  • deja_vu

    *sigh* :-S oh well.. i was abstract to begin with..

  • deja_vu

    @amma..

    i write like this.. even the detailed details ends up coming up rather than done when u reread and edit.. this was as it came.. no real editing or additions.. and its not so great.. so i let it be.. the only thing i liked is that it was somehow connected to smthing else i liked.. thats all..

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